Stella L. Luna
Being the Dean-Poetry Critic and Assessment at Motivational Strips Academy of Literary Excellence and Wisdom, i have been asked to evaluate a poem of Stella L. Luna, a poet from Philippine, I recommend her for membership of the Academy in case she has not been already a member. Her poem and my comments are below for the poetry readers, I further assert that Philippine is a fertile country, many of contemporary poets and translators are working for promotion of literature.
MOON RIVER By S. L. Luna
Life begins on the river.
No matter what, it will
flow to live.
The gifts of the Earth spring forth
by the riverbed.
Since the dawn of creation
Its mouth spews new beginnings .
We bring our wares in wagons
to cross over
We bring food to ease people’s hunger
We bring aid and relief to the sick
From the doctors with no borders.
We see children crossing currents
though rough and wild,
That is their dedication.
Risking their life and limbs
There’s no better future
Than a good education.
Under the moon, love stories were birthed
and songs were written.
Her long hair was a flowing golden river.
As her lover comes and goes,
Comforting her like the ebb
and flow of the waves.
Her love was unending like the waters
that flow through the sea
And promises were laid under
the blue moon
Sealed and kept alive by the soul spirits
That dwell underneath.
Wars have begun and ended on the river.
A place to hide when haunted down by enemies
As fortress and escape it has stood—
By the Bridge on the River Kwai,
Men have died and blood has been spilled.
The river is a gallant battleground
In honor and defence of our Motherland.
We have given birth on the River
and life has ended there.
The moon is a witness to its cycle of birth and rebirth.
In the river we sing with joy, with sorrow,
We give thanks.
Life will end at the river
While we are singing our last song.
The poem ‘Moon River’ by S. L. Luna begins with simplicity but as it advance it becomes complex and complex thought wise , it delineates flow of passion that dregs on reminiscence. The flow of river in literature symbolically signifies the flow of time in which life emerges and the smudges, but the flow of the river is constant, its ripples and waves big or small represent days, months and years, they surround incidents that occur and then become the part of history. The flow of river is a gift rather a constant process of creation and its banks remain brimming with its creative potential. We cannot swim across the river of life without the wares of life, we have to take care of our fellow brethren, each man in life becomes prolific when he share with the fellow beings his victual, Oscar Wilde says, ‘There is no Mystery so great as Misery.’ The river of time is not an easy task to swim across, we have to put in danger our own existence for others, we all men and women are the passers, life is hard but our mutual cooperation, affinities and compassion change it into a fun, men and women despite hardships sing songs and love one another, these elements chisel life more and more which ultimately appears a divine phenomenon. It is time we begin with and we end with, we take in it shelter when we are being chased and haunted by our enemies. The river of time has also its negative attributes and features, it is indifferent, it takes toll of human blood when it surges. The last lines lend beauty to the whole poem, in these lines the poetess refers to the accomplishment of the whole drama. Diction is simple, the flow of emotions is natural one, the whole expression doesn’t seem to be a deliberate attempt. The poem has its own vivid imagery that takes the reader in grip, but the lines, ‘Her long hair was a flowing golden river. As her lover comes and goes, Comforting her like the ebb and flow of the waves’ is the best depiction of imagery, poet’s mood from beginning to the end is the same which may be regarded as a serious poetic mood, there are some instances when we find poet’s imagination soaring higher than usual flight of imagination. Kido, I award 8 marks.
Prof. Muhammad Shanazar